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Independent Weiting：  Case of Benjinin Franklin, gathering great minds under one roof and then establishing a most world-renown libray. Both ways work. When a practical goal is involved, however, Benjimin Franklin may best be regareded as a role model in this respect and asking people for advice often turn out to be the prime alternative.

Benjinin Franklin 簡介：

 班傑明·富蘭克林是美國著名政治家、科學家，同時亦是出版商、印刷商、記者、作家、慈善家；更是傑出的外交家及發明家。他是美國革命時重要的領導人，參與多項重要文件的草擬，並曾出任美國駐法國大使，成功取得法國支持美國獨立，同時被視為美國國父之一。班傑明·富蘭克林曾經進行多項關於電的實驗，並且發明避雷針。

1731年班傑明·富蘭克林與其他人合力組建了費城的第一家公共圖書館「費城圖書館俱樂部」(Library Company of Philadelphia)。圖書館收藏的書籍包括神學、歷史、文學、科學等；之後北美各城市亦效法建立；對北美各地人民的啟蒙起了不少作用。班傑明·富蘭克林1743年開始籌備一家學院，八年後學院成立，即為賓州大學的前身。與此同時，他開始研究電及其他科學問題。1751年班傑明·富蘭克林在賓夕法尼亞州成立了一家醫院。這醫院日後成為全美國的首家醫院

。1775年3月，從英國倫敦回到北美洲。之後於費城，他被選為英國北美殖民地大陸會議的成員，參與起草《美國獨立宣言》。1776年，富蘭克林被派到法國任代表美國的專員，班傑明·富蘭克林出使法國十分成功，取得對初生美國來說非常重要的法美軍事同盟，以及談判簽訂了1783年的《1783年巴黎條約》。同時班傑明·富蘭克林亦是反對蓄奴的先驅。他從法國回國不久後即成為一個反對奴隸制，尋求釋放被非法禁錮的黑人組織主席。1787年，已經退休的班傑明·富蘭克林出席了修改美國憲法的會議，成為唯一同時簽署美國三項最重要法案文件的建國先賢。這三份文件分別是：《獨立宣言》，《1783年巴黎條約》，以及1787年的《美國憲法》。在這一年，富蘭克林捐款修建了以他命名的富蘭克林·馬歇爾大學。
 

範文：

  Experience and knowledge borrowed or learned from others' advice contribute greatly to effectiveness and effeciency for a goal-accomplishment. Not all experience and knowledge related to problem-solving can be obtained by personal effort alone due to limitations of mind and capabilities of each individual. A single thought in someone's mind is, more often than not, far less shining compared with group's wisdom. That explains the famous old saying that one sees further when standing upon the shoulders' of past great giants; that explains why a great leader is always with greater minds; that also explains why teamwork in corperation is highly emphasized in the 21st century. Brainstorm and exchange of ideas between different thoughts never fail to enhance capabilities of each individula involved, a team, a company, an institution, a country, or even the entire global village.    

  Asking others' advice instead of getting everything done on one's own promotes democracy and communication too. In terms of democracy, it is necessary to give others rights and chances to speak since the problem may concern them in different ways, and their saying in turn reflects our respect toward freedom of speech as well as their wisdom. In terms of communication, idea exchange sometimes focuses more than solutions, and hereby better mutual understanding about perspectives, principles, praticalities and personalities of each other.    

  Admittely turning to others for help and suggestion by no means refers to absolute and irresponsible dependence. Consideration upon different thoughts and ideas broadens our mind, enlarges our vision, furthers understanding, enhances more effective and efficient brainstorm, and stresses mutual respect in groups and communities, which undoubtedly gives rise to better, if not the best solutions. As is paraphrased from John F Kenedy, brainstormed, there is little we cannot do while divided, there is little we can do.